Wednesday, November 3, 2010

come the morning actions and the first of light spent in choice

A valued cast still uncertain,
As the steam flows behind it's curtain,

Shall i peer into the fray,
Cast blight aside before the day,

Let the light grow from our eyes,
Or play into a small demise.

Before the sunrise I will decide,
Let emotions seek a better guide,

Or lay until the nymph returns.
Clean breath, the circuit table turns,

She will be the one to choose,
To drink a love behind the boose,

Put yourself into her hands,
Like she did on castled sands,

Ignore or heed the words we spoke,
Call the bluff, or let them soak,

Come it will the story told,
of us and ours it will unfold.

The difference being I haven't moved,
Within the thoughts indeed has proved,

Something more then unions past,
Channeled, built and meant to last.

12 comments:

  1. "Ignore or heed the words we spoke,
    Call the bluff, or let them soak,"

    What an important decision, sometimes.
    Well done! I've followed, because I loved your previous post as well. Before and after?
    Tomatoes!

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  2. Beautiful words form beautiful imagery. Nice write.

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  3. Brown this is truly beautiful love the flow and imagery! :-)

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  4. the form is quite effective.. Magical!

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  5. Beautiful use of couplets and imagery - I especially enjoyed this:
    "Or lay until the nymph returns.
    Clean breath, the circuit table turns,"

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  6. A valued cast still uncertain,
    As the steam flows behind it's curtain,

    ..

    oh, dear,
    your opening is so very grand.
    love your breath taking tale.

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  7. Thank you so much to all! I'm taken back by all the amazing comments...and look forward to leaving some on your sites in the future.

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  8. I love the rhythm and the rhyme, so smooth and appealing. I hate my rhyme, it sounds like song lyrics or greeting cards, but this is pristine.
    Di

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  9. How are you, friend?

    Glad to land on your exciting poetry land here.

    Welcome linking in a poem to our potluck today, Thanks in advance!

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  10. Greetings, how are you today?
    we are so happy to have you at our potluck and thanks a bunch for the sweet contribution. Your involvement means a lot to us.
    Any poem is acceptable, simply share and enjoy...
    week 11 is open, hope to see you in.
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